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Four major UAW locals approve Chrysler deal was an article provided by the Associated Press which appeared in the Toronto Star on Oct .25 , 2007. This article was poorly written since, it gave vague information about what exactly the Chrysler workers were voting on and the results of the outcome the vote had. This article also had a poor ending. Even though the article was a news brief and meant to be short, more information could have been provided or the information which was provided could of been written in a more in depth manner.

In order to make the article better quite a few things could have been done. The article could have mentioned the criteria of the new contract which the Chrysler workers signed with the company. The article could of also mentioned why 78 percent of unions members approved the contract while 22 percent disapproved. The article could of also mentioned why not all members of the union voted on the tentative agreement. The ending of the article is poor because the fact mentioned in the last sentence does not give any background as to why that fact exist.

If the article mentioned what the criteria of the new contract was readers may have been more likely to understand why some Chrysler workers signed the tentative agreement when others did not. By mentioning the reason(s) why not all union members voted on the tentative agreement readers may have been able to draw comparisons between why some Chrysler workers voted no on the agreement and why some did not vote at all. The last sentence in in the article states " Eight union locals have now turned down the landmark pact, while seven have approved it" (Associated Press, The Toronto Star). Overall, this article would of been made better off if the author structured it in such a way that there were reasons for the facts rather than just the facts by themselves. This article has a lot of underdeveloped information in it which cannot be a good thing. By providing the information as to why things are the way they are between Chrysler workers and the company the article would of flowed a lot better and been easier to read.